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Charlie Walls's avatar

Helluva turn at the end! Great job!

Not like last time was a great line

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

This one was hard to read. It hit a little too close to home for me. Not me personally, and not in the same way, but close enough that I felt it. You said so much in so few words here. Addiction, consequences, guilt… and that awful moment when there’s no taking it back.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

It hit pretty close to home for me. I just had that battle. Sitting in the parking lot. Making excuses. Walking in the store, deciding against it, and then. Something just kept pulling. I picked it up again, excuses were made. I was fortunate enough to walk out with nothing. I’m sorry you have had the experiences in life that allow you to have a deeper reaction to this. It’s tough living in these bodies that want things on their own. Thank you for reading Andrea. 💜

Ginny Lynns (Remembring2Laugh)'s avatar

(SIGH!) so sorry…

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Your story could have gone so much differently; I'm glad it went the direction it did. As I said, for me it wasn't me... it was my husband. He had been clean and sober for a year, and long story short, his "friend" got him drunk and high one night to the point he could not stand or walk. The friend and bartender literally carried him to his car and put him behind the wheel. That was the night he died... Head on into a limo, injuring the driver very badly.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Holy shit. Andrea I’m so sorry. That’s horrible.

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Thank you, it was horrible, but I'm honestly at peace with it now.

Ginny Lynns (Remembring2Laugh)'s avatar

OMG, I cannot "like" this reply but I am so glad you wrote and posted it. <3

Ginny Lynns (Remembring2Laugh)'s avatar

I hope friend and bartender were either prosecuted or sued under the dramshop laws. Oh gosh, so many sad tales about alcoholism. I have a long-time friend who is as old as me, whose husband is awaiting sentencing for vehicular homicide for driving drunk and killing another person....ugh!

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Actually, no. I tried. My ex-boyfriend is a defense attorney; at the time, he wasn't going to take the case himself, but he connected me with his friend, who had a high success rate in those types of situations. That attorney really wanted to take the case, but we needed a witness. Ed's friend (the one involved) and his girlfriend originally felt horrible and were going to cooperate with us and testify. Unfortunately, about a month later they changed their mind. They said the bartender was a friend and so was the owner of the bar, and they "didn't want anyone to get in trouble." I'm sure you can imagine my rage. Oh wow, about your friend... alcoholism is such an ugly thing. 😔

R.S.T.'s avatar

"Not like last time." Wow.

This was great. Thank you.

James (HVR)'s avatar

So much with so little. Again.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you 🫶

Hina Gondal's avatar

Genius 🫶

Aaliya's avatar

Such a powerful narrative! Hugo’s internal struggle is so relatable and raw.❤️‍🩹

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you. It is a personal struggle of mine.

Aaliya's avatar

Sending you a big hug my friend you are not alone ♥️🙏🏼

Sincerely Seb's avatar

That’s very kind of you. Thank you for the hug.

Kathy Dirickson's avatar

Very good and your dribble had a message and I don't know how such creativity works on dribbles. I would be counting words instead of finding the right words. You did awesome.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate that. The challenge is half the fun!

Ginny Lynns (Remembring2Laugh)'s avatar

Seb is right! The challenge is half the fun! And they are so brilliant to read; I love me some drabbles! Here's my most recent one: https://virginialynns.substack.com/p/jesus-grew-up-and-changed-his-name?r=ql3sy&utm_campaign=post-expanded-share&utm_medium=web

Gary L Taylor's avatar

That's a dark, sad piece. Powerful writing.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you Gary. I appreciate that. I wanted to send a message to myself having just managed to leave the store with nothing.

The In Between's avatar

Wow. That was sad.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

My drabbles are so sad, might be a perspective problem.

Ginny Lynns (Remembring2Laugh)'s avatar

It's a good way to get across a sad story quickly and usually without too much pain. Like pulling off a bandaid fast!

Untamed Eulogy's avatar

Your ability to create an entire story with so few words is something I always admire. Beautifully paced and deeply affecting!

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you very much! It’s something new, I always considered myself a wordy writer.

John Marshall's avatar

Drabble is new and curious term, but you used your 100 words well.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

It was new to me too! Thank you very much, that’s very kind of you to say.

Rebekah Mallory's avatar

I like drabbles and damn did this one bite back! 🚔

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Yeah this one had an appetite. Thank you for reading!

Rebekah Mallory's avatar

Sure did! Thank for writing and introducing me to drabbles!