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Sattie R's avatar

Your drabble paints quite a picture. The last part...wow...

Kathy Dirickson's avatar

By the picture I thought it was a reflection of sharpening your knowledge of scripture. But no, too simple.

You had him plunge the knife in his heart. Man you can do some demented drabbles. But I must be demented too. I read each and every 100 words.😊

Sincerely Seb's avatar

That’s ok! It’s fiction! 😇

Kathy Dirickson's avatar

Right!

James (HVR)'s avatar

Ummm.

Untamed Eulogy's avatar

the ultimate irony is that his desperate obsession with proving his own worthiness was actually the supreme act of pride! Very nicely written !

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you!

Paula Cole-Miller's avatar

Touché'!!! You actually summed it up in line 4...EGO, which in essence means, "...Easing God Out! And the stabbing in the heart was quite poignant, as well, for the heart is the center of a person's thoughts, feelings and desires! in Luke 6:45, the Lord tells us, '...for out of the abundance of the heart, his mouth speaks!" He also tells us in Matthew 15:19, "...for out of the heart come evil thoughts, murder (...and there's all kind of ways to kill a person, right?), adultery, sexual immorality, theft, false witness and slander!" So, I find it to be very apropos, because this seems to be the tenor of this administration, and it has a trickle down affect, for sure! Blessings one and all!

Sincerely Seb's avatar

When we temper the ego, we humble ourselves, and work better together for the betterment of all.

Luke 22:42 nevertheless not My will but Thine be done.

@robopulp's avatar

That was a shock 😲

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Oof, so dark but good! I love how you took the whole "get rid of the ego" idea and made it so literal and horrifying! And all in 100 words. I'm impressed!

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you! As someone constantly battling the ego I wish it were as easy as a quick surgery, although I would personally opt for a professional if that were the case! 😝

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Hahaha so basically… a spiritual lobotomy? 😆😜

Sincerely Seb's avatar

If it works!

Priya Hinduja's avatar

Well written!

Fragments and the Dark's avatar

These drabbles are brilliant! That is real talent right there! 🖤🖤

Sincerely Seb's avatar

That’s high praise coming from you! Thank you so much!

Ginny Lynns (Remembring2Laugh)'s avatar

Most people do think of the ego in this way and have a lot of hate in their hearts. I'm very glad few actually take the knife and plunge it in.

Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

You packed a powerful shift into so few words. I especially liked how the meaning of “getting rid of the ego” changes completely in the final lines. A thought-provoking drabble that lingers after the last sentence.

Thank you for sharing.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you for reading Antonio. I’m glad it had an impact.

Laurie MacIntosh's avatar

Horror Drabble is your jam!!

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Getting more horror and less sad! ☺️

Thank you for reading.

R.S.T.'s avatar

"I would swallow my pride, would choke on the rinds

But the lack thereof would leave me empty inside

Swallow my doubt, turn it inside out

Find nothin' but faith in nothin"

I loved it. Great work.