Seb, your poem captures the heavy weight of monotony and inner chaos. The ticking clock, the search for “sugar,” and constant frustration reflect a mind trapped in cycles of exhaustion and self-reproach. Lines like being “blindsided by yourself” show the raw struggle with one’s own restless thoughts, making the poem a stark, honest look at the clouded mind.
There’s a real sense of burnout and pressure in this, and you put it into words in such a sharp, relatable way.
Thank you, I’m glad it resonated with you.
Seb, your poem captures the heavy weight of monotony and inner chaos. The ticking clock, the search for “sugar,” and constant frustration reflect a mind trapped in cycles of exhaustion and self-reproach. Lines like being “blindsided by yourself” show the raw struggle with one’s own restless thoughts, making the poem a stark, honest look at the clouded mind.
Thank you!
There’s a real sense of burnout and pressure in this, and you put it into words in such a sharp, relatable way.
Hye please can you share your thoughts on this
https://open.substack.com/pub/hawtornvrabot/p/between-dreams-and-nightmares?utm_source=share&utm_medium=android&shareImageVariant=overlay&r=61i45v
It's good! I like your parts, they are quite emotive.
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Love this