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Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

You created a powerful sense of isolation with remarkably few words. The image of the light watching back stayed with me long after I finished reading.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you Antonio. The inspiration was generous to me.

Ethereal Twilight Poetry's avatar

Captured the feeling beautifully!

Deep South Writer's avatar

I have nightmares along these lines and I don’t like it at all. You encapsulated the core feeling of loneliness and how it distributes despair throughout a person’s life.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you! And thank you for sharing. I appreciate it.

Deep South Writer's avatar

🤜🏼🤛🏼

Christine's avatar

💗

imi's avatar

“Suspended in nothingness” is such a good line. It delivers that state very precisely. Great job Seb!

Robert Lorenz's avatar

Having experienced 'night terrors' numerous times while I worked 24hr shifts I can say you summed it well. Unless you have experienced it you cannot completely convey the trapped feeling in that state which is neither awake nor asleep, maybe drowning is close.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Thank you for reading and I’m sorry you recognize the feelings.

I have another perspective based piece that actually touches on that exact similarity called The Ocean of Unconsciousness.

Robert Lorenz's avatar

I tried searching your posts but was unable to find it.

Sincerely Seb's avatar

Substack does people with multiple publications dirty. My account's main one is my poetry publication so only that shows up when using the app on mobile unfortunately. I'll link the story for you.

https://sincerelyseb.substack.com/p/the-ocean-of-unconsciousness

Robert Lorenz's avatar

Thanks.

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Daniela Grothe's avatar

Half asleep perfectly fits this story then!

Inspiring, I’m thinking about writing a scene of myself half asleep now, too!

Sincerely Seb's avatar

You should! Let me know when you do I'd love to read it.