The pacing mirrors the fall so effectively that I found myself unconsciously reading faster as the ground approached. Then that final line completely reframes everything that came before.
The emotional weight isn't just the physical danger—it's the father's impossible choice and what he believes will be his children's final memory of him. That makes the ending land even harder.
The ending was unexpected and powerful. I liked how the formatting slowed the moment down and built suspense, that really made me feel the fear and uncertainty of the situation. Well written
What struck me is that the story isn't really about falling. It's about expectation. We often imagine the worst moment as the impact, but psychologically the longest suffering happens beforehand, while the mind races through imagined futures that haven't happened yet. Sometimes the thing we survive isn't the fall—it is the terror of believing we already know how it ends.
I’m glad to hear that! Aye, the imagination is a powerful thing. So often we sacrifice the present moment to suffer from imagined futures that never arrive. Thank you for reading.
You are talented Seb 🫶
Thank you. 🫣
Very creative, especially the ending! Loved the use of full stops at the end.
Thank you!
Seb, This is brilliantly constructed.
The pacing mirrors the fall so effectively that I found myself unconsciously reading faster as the ground approached. Then that final line completely reframes everything that came before.
The emotional weight isn't just the physical danger—it's the father's impossible choice and what he believes will be his children's final memory of him. That makes the ending land even harder.
Thank you so much. I’m glad it hit the mark!
Love this. Thank you for introducing me to the Drabble. Will definitely use in future. 🥰🥰🥰
I’m so glad to hear it! Please let me know when you do, I would love to read it.
Will do. 🥰
So very good! Seb this was a pleasure to read and to feel the sensation.... of . . . . . . Falling! Thank you for such an evocative piece.
Thank you for reading and sharing!
Of course!
That's good!!
Thank you, and thank you for reading!
The ending was unexpected and powerful. I liked how the formatting slowed the moment down and built suspense, that really made me feel the fear and uncertainty of the situation. Well written
Thank you! I’m glad the formatting worked!
What struck me is that the story isn't really about falling. It's about expectation. We often imagine the worst moment as the impact, but psychologically the longest suffering happens beforehand, while the mind races through imagined futures that haven't happened yet. Sometimes the thing we survive isn't the fall—it is the terror of believing we already know how it ends.
I’m glad to hear that! Aye, the imagination is a powerful thing. So often we sacrifice the present moment to suffer from imagined futures that never arrive. Thank you for reading.
And I here I was thinking chickens can't fly
Air Force One!
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This was a great read, Seb! 🥰 The implications at the end with that small sentence: „I‘m alive“ what will happen now and how does his life go on! 😱🤯
Thank you! Yeah this was a wild one. I’m glad you enjoyed it!